Wednesday, July 23, 2014

Child of Sin

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He was a child of sin. They called him a bastard. His childhood was a blur of different men and his mother's drinking binges. When he was ten, his neighbors called him a thief. And when he turned twenty, he was caught for shoplifting. By thirty, he was in prison awaiting his trial for murder.


P.S. This is my first attempt in writing 55 Fiction, a try at telling a story in just 55 words.  

This post is written for Day 23 of the Ultimate Blog Challenge for July 2014 and NaBloPoMo

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  2. Aathira, your fingers did express many things with out actually expressing them in words.
    I think while writing 55 word fictions, you should add an unexpected twist or even some mystery. That way you can you can unleash your large potential. :)

    /*Scratching my head and thinking whether why I didn't get such talking fingers--*/

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    1. Thanks so much Stranger :) It is a humble attempt! Btw, please give me the link to your blog so that I can see for myself about your fingers! I can't find your page when I take your profile :(

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  3. A sad story but many times it is reality! Well expressed Aathira :)

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  4. It makes me feel sorry for him. But then again,nothing can justify a wrong doing.

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    1. Definitely. But often, a criminal is born due to society.

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  5. Well written for first attempt Aathira :) I haven't written one yet and I can only wonder how tough it might be to enfold a whole story in 55. Good one :)

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    1. Thanks a lot, Shanx! You should try it out too. It's a new challenge to confine a story in a short space! :)

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  6. The story of his life in 55 words. It's sad that he bears all the scars for his parents' misdoings.

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  7. People have no idea how young kids are troubled are a very tender age. Its a sad sad thing. I know a child of divorce, battling anger issues now. Its really sad.

    Beautiful writing Aathira!

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    1. Thanks a lot, Soum! It is a disturbing fact that many children are forced to face the cruel brunt of society's jokes. Certain wounds, especially inflicted during childhood, are hard to heal.

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  8. Some children don't even stand a chance :(

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  9. oh no that is so sad .. i wish no kid has to go through this

    Bikram's

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    1. I hope so too. Thank you, Bikram!

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