Friday, December 5, 2014

Broken Trust


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With each touch, you made music for my ears. Why was it that time spent apart from you always felt like torture? 

It was never meant to be easy; and that's what I loved about us. But no matter what, you took my breath away, each day; kept me grounded to the stark reality called life. 

I still believe destiny played a part, a cruel twist of fate when I broke your trust and you left, only to never return again. 

 This post is written for Five sentence fiction for Trust at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
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34 comments:

  1. CRDDecember 5, 2014 at 10:48 PM

    Very well written. Wonder how it'd have shaped up if you were allowed a few more sentences.

    Do drop by mine.

    Cheers
    CRD

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    1. AathiraDecember 5, 2014 at 10:57 PM

      Thank you, CRD! Yes, there is always a scope for a bigger picture, right? I'm hopping on to your blog right away.

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  2. Rajesh BabuDecember 6, 2014 at 5:12 AM

    i like image so much and i really like your writing style.

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  3. CifarDecember 6, 2014 at 2:36 PM

    powerful five sentences , brilliant

    Trustworthy

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  4. UnknownDecember 6, 2014 at 2:40 PM

    So intese, loved it..!!

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  5. UnknownDecember 6, 2014 at 2:43 PM

    Broken trust is always difficult to heal.. Well written!
    Drop by mine as well.. :)

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    1. AathiraDecember 15, 2014 at 8:00 PM

      Thanks Ramya! I shall check out your blog too :)

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  6. Robin Leigh MorganDecember 7, 2014 at 9:25 AM

    Trust is a TERRIBLE thing to lose, especially if it had belonged to someone you once had a loving, meaningful relationship with, I loved the emotions for response has elicited from your readers. Have a GREAT WEEK with whatever you do.

    I've love for you to comment on my post for this week's prompt word. And if possible to check out my second book, "Micro Fiction - An Anthology" which is a collection of the responses I've written and post links for Lillie's prompt word each week, as well as others. This is NOT A REQUEST for you or anyone else to buy a copy of my book.

    http://www.amazon.com/dp/B00QH15K4M

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    1. AathiraDecember 15, 2014 at 8:01 PM

      Thanks so much, Robin. Indeed, trust is a terrible thing to lose.

      I shall check out your blog too :)

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  7. SankeerthDecember 7, 2014 at 10:12 AM

    Very well penned!

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  8. NamrataDecember 7, 2014 at 10:24 AM

    Broken trust is the only thing that will never heal with time. Each sentence was properly utilized. :)

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  9. Anita Jeyan December 7, 2014 at 2:13 PM

    Short and power packed.. good one !

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  10. Red HandedDecember 7, 2014 at 9:06 PM

    Ouch. This one hurt. You are good!!

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  11. AnonymousDecember 8, 2014 at 3:08 PM

    Nice - you did a very good job getting that 'pain' across in the 5 sentences allocated.
    Well done.
    KT

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  12. LocomenteDecember 10, 2014 at 1:57 PM

    And a broken heart too..
    Nice one!

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  13. KeirthanaDecember 11, 2014 at 9:49 AM

    A broken trust is almost impossible to mend.

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  14. Reema D'souzaDecember 13, 2014 at 9:09 AM

    Sad but its the truth! Trust once broken is very difficult to be mended. Well written Aathira :)

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  15. chrisDecember 13, 2014 at 2:44 PM

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  16. Rupasi December 15, 2014 at 4:18 PM

    Oh! :O
    I wasn't expecting the last line :O
    but nice twist...

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  17. AathiraDecember 15, 2014 at 8:05 PM

    Thanks.

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