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The moment I stepped into the party, I couldn't take my eyes off her. I was dazzled, not that I could see much of her face, more than half her face was hidden by the mask she wore.
I caught a pair of feline eyes looking at me through them, the kind that reminds you of golden specks in a pool of brown, that drew me in and yet I could not place them.
And it was only later in the night, when I got her to loosen up over a couple of drinks did I realize why she looked so familiar. She reminded me of my wife who was tucked away safely in a box under my bed and I smiled.
This post is written for Five sentence fiction for Dazzles at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
i like it the way you wrote this fiction in a totally different & amazing way ! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Crimson Curls :)
Deletenice, the last line did the magic :)
ReplyDeleteFrom light to dark in five sentences - very good!
ReplyDeleteCool--and yikes! I hope this woman takes the drinks and runs!
ReplyDeleteMy bit is here.
Oh yes, I hope so too! Thanks Dolly :)
DeleteOh my! He smiled? How can he do that? yeah, i too felt the same, better she runs! :)
ReplyDeleteThat's how stalkers work, I guess ;)
DeleteWhoaa.. the last line - super ending !!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Jyotsna!
DeleteWhoa! Yikes!!! Didn't see that coming...
ReplyDeleteHehe :D a small 'twist' :)
DeleteWhat an eerie ending! Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Shail :)
DeleteWhat an ending! A different take indeed. Loved it :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Reema!
DeleteYou took it to a real dark corner.... super
ReplyDeleteTina from The Sunny Side of Life
Thanks so much Tina!
DeleteI loved that twist in the end, like everybody else seems to ;) Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you Soumyaa :) Comments like these make my day :)
DeleteGoddamn! That was a crazy twist!
ReplyDeleteThank you Red!
Deletegave me goosebumps........... too good...
ReplyDeleteGlad that it could give you goosebumps ;) Thank you!
DeleteCool & chilling, Aathira :)
ReplyDeleteOh wow!! Lady, you make me want to give you another award now!
ReplyDeleteThis was sheer brilliance.
And your words make me want to write more :) Thanks Babe!
DeleteI love twists, adds intrigue and an awakening while reading
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteAnd what a twist it was!!! Bone chilling smile that gave me the heebie-jeebies!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Shilpa :) It's okay to be creepy once in a while, I guess!
Deletewow.. what a twist !! Superb.. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! :)
DeleteWow..what a twist! :D
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it :)
DeleteOMG Aathira, what a great twist! Simply wonderful,
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Usha Ma'am!
DeleteThat was creepy.
ReplyDeleteI guess!
DeleteOMG!! He smiled??!!! :O Brilliant take Aathira..
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Anusree :)
Deletenow that's not a nice place to stash up your dead secrets.Unless you like a few nightmares here and there :P
ReplyDeleteNice twist
Cheers
CRD
Thanks so much CRD :) Of course, one must be prepared for nightmares never the less!
Deletedangerous confession,narrated beautifully
ReplyDeleteThe Lone Survivor
Thanks so much Cifar :)
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