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He was a regular customer at the local supermarket where he battled his conflicts about the purchases he made, so often did he shop there that the shop assistants were on a first name basis with him. Maybe it was gentle demeanor or maybe it was that he poked in nobody's business; the children in the neighborhood always looked forward to those days he went shopping as he always bought them chocolates and other little treats. The old ladies blessed him for his kindheartedness for he offered a helping hand around their homes.
Each week he went and bought large ceramic jars, the ones that are used to make pickles for it was his hobby and people always wondered among themselves why such a nice man chose to remain unmarried. He shrugged off their inquisitiveness with a smile and went back home to his secret- the dozens of female brains that remained pickled in the jars that were arranged neatly on the shelves in his basement, one for each of the women he had dated.
This post is written for Five sentence fiction for Conflict at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
P.S. I'm not a psycho! It can be partly blamed on the numerous Dexter episodes that I have watched in the recent past.
Well written Aathira! ROFL to the P.S :) Dexter is great.. have to finish it with breaking bad :D
ReplyDeleteThat reminds me. i need to go and watch words too :)
Thank you, Shanx :) I have finished with Dexter. Yet to watch Breaking Bad. Heard it's really good. Go watch The Words! A must watch for all writers :)
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Thanks so much, Shanx! I'm honored that you chose me for the award :) My post shall be coming up soon!
DeleteLol...didn't expect that!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad that I could give you the unexpected :)
DeleteWoah what a conflicting ending! You are becoming a pro at inducing goosebumps Aathira ;)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Vinodini! Welcome back after a long break :)
DeleteSomehow I guessed such a dark-secret is due, Aathira :)
ReplyDeleteI am reading your mind :)
Damn! Are my stories getting predictable now? Thank you, Anita! :)
Deletedangerous man, unexpected climax,truly amazing
ReplyDeleteDilemma
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Thanks so much, Cifar! Welcome to my blog :) I'm following your blog right back!
DeleteJust when I thought there must be something wrong with this guy, you dropped the bomb.. Well done Athira..
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Vinitha! I wanted a little 'twist' :)
DeleteOHHH! Very Dexter-like in rendition! The murderer that nobody sees. Very chilling and effectively done!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Shailaja! Finished with the Dexter series and the effect had to pop up somewhere :)
DeletePickled brains...yummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
ReplyDeleteLol...hahahaha I liked!
One jar of pickled brains coming right up, Red ;) Thank you!
Deleteok. I am glad for the P.S, I was shocked for a min :P I have never been a fan of Dexter but seen enough of it to know where this inspiration came from :)
ReplyDeleteOkay, now I'm glad that I included the P.S!!! :D The series was addictive and I recently finished watching it. But then, I don't think I shall go for a re-run of that one anytime soon :)
DeleteOuch! that was a dark one..nicely done, Aathira! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Uma :)
DeleteMy my, this was creepy. Not psychotic, really? :P
ReplyDeleteHehehe... No, not really ;) Thank you, K!
DeleteCreeepyyy! I hope it is not inspired from a real incident :P
DeleteThank you, Ankita! Like I said, inspired by Dexter :)
DeleteThe Dexter episodes about the Barrel Girls was running through my mind as I reached the end of the story. And then I see your PS. :)
ReplyDeleteThere is a story similar to this by Roald Dahl, where a man's brain is preserved by a scientist after his death forexperiments. I forget the name. Have you read it?
Thanks so much, Spiff! Welcome to my blog :)
DeleteAnd, no, I haven't read the story you are talking about. It sounds interesting. I have a collection of short stories by Roald Dahl, shall check and see if this story is there :)
I simply had to go and dig up the story, if not I wouldn't have slept all night (incidentally, many a Roald Dahl story has robbed me of sleep. Spooky). It's "William and Mary". Do read it if you haven't.
DeleteI definitely shall! Roald Dahl has that effect, doesn't he? Now, I'm just praying that I have that story in my collection.
DeleteNo, I just went and checked, it's not there :( Shall try and get my hands on it ASAP though.
http://www.ceng.metu.edu.tr/~ucoluk/yazin/William_and_Mary.html
DeleteHere you go! In case you are my kind, who doesn't like reading much off the computer monitor, then just ignore this. :)
Awww! Thank you, Spiff :) That was sweet of you!
DeleteYes, I'm very much your kind who still believes that the joys of reading can only be through a good old book which you can sniff and cradle in your hands and read at leisure. But since the story sounds too tempting, I shall do the deed and read it on my computer :)
This is really scary.
ReplyDeleteSuch a double faced psycho he is.