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Never thought I would say this
But the day has come to yield
To temptation, to the sinful present,
And to make tantalizing memories...
I can smell it on your breath,
By the lies you whisper in my ear,
In the unmasked glory in your eyes,
But still I weaken to temptation
Smoke arises from the glowing tip
As you put the cigarette to your lip
And you smile at me
For I have given in to temptation
The pain is sharp but you hold me
Chained with your eyes,
Watching my life ebb away
Rejoicing in my wretchedness
But it now longer matters
My misery is put to rest
As death kisses me with
The ultimate temptation
I have written about smoke twice! Its an interesting topic. You have done fair justice to it :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Soumya :) Yes, each time there's a different dimension to it.
DeleteI like this one...Okey..I had to to read twice to understand this. But that is just because this is too good and I am stupid. :D
ReplyDeleteYou flatter me :) Or maybe it's because I had no idea what to write ;) Thank you, Red!
DeleteSame here.. Had to read twice. :p
ReplyDeleteThanks, Anu :) I take that as a good sign ;)
DeleteDamn, that's intense. I like it :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot! :)
DeleteNice one Aathira :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Shanx :)
DeleteNicely penned. :)
ReplyDeleteAnd yeah, it was intense.
Also, thanks for dropping by. :)
Thanks so much :)
DeleteThe pleasure was mine. You have an awesome blog!
WOW very well written mam.. thank you for sharing as dumbo's like me need to read such writing to make our own writings better
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You are now making me feel awkward, B! This was nothing great. Just a random try at something different. I'm humbled reading your comment. But, Thank you all the same :)
DeleteI usually don't like to read poetry. But this was awesome. :)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad that you took time to read this one :) Thank you, Pawan!
DeleteLovely. Well conveyed :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jyo :)
DeleteEven when you know death will eat you, temptation is hard to resist. A very well-written aspect of smoke :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Darling :) I love reading your comments! They always make my day :)
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