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I watch my daughter playing in the rain with the colored paper boats; seeing her unmasked joy as I sipped my cup of steaming coffee. In her, I see myself, many years ago. So many dreams and my life had been brimming with hope, like hers now.
But like the rain water trickling into the paper boats slowly, threatening to reduce it into a pulpy mass any moment, my hopes had been crushed like those dainty crafts.
It cannot happen again, I think fiercely; my daughter would chase her dreams and no one can snatch that away from her.
This post is written for Five sentence fiction for Rain at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
Also, linking it to Day 18 of the Ultimate Blog Challenge for July 2014 and NaBloPoMo.
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Hello! Thank you and welcome to my blog :)
DeleteGreat little story in the short word count. Love the comparison of her life to those paper boats in the rain. Nicely done!
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Thanks a lot, Cathy :)
DeleteVery nice story. Daughters are a shadow of their mom's personality.
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DeleteBeautiful story Aathira :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Reema :)
Deletestrong mother...what else does a daughter need.
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Yes, that's all that matters. Thanks Red :)
Deletewow truely mesmerizing!!! hats off to u aathira
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Deletenice take on prompt Aathira :) !
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Indeed. Thanks Swathi! :)
DeleteChase your dreams and dreams do come true
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I agree :)
DeleteA moment in time can tell us so much--about us, about what we want for those we love.
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Thanks so much, Sonali :) Welcome to my blog!
DeleteThese aren't just 5 sentences...These are 5 powerful, emotion-packed sentences..
ReplyDeleteGosh Aathira, everyday I fall a little more in love with your words!
Thank so much Babe :) I love you more!
DeleteYes, we cannot life inundate us, can we?
ReplyDeleteNo, we can't. Thank you!
DeleteThanks so much Britton :)
ReplyDeleteOhh... thats lovely Aathira... that should always happen... it's not the time to differentiate between girls and guys
ReplyDeleteTina from The Sunny Side of Life
Thank you, Tina! Glad you liked it :)
DeleteA lovely story, Aathira, conveyed in your usual smooth style :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Uma!
DeleteGood story & message, Aathira.
ReplyDeleteMay our kids get all the opportunities- sun or rain...
Thanks a lot, Anita!
DeleteHer mom will see to it that her boats aren't pulped off :) Strong mom, n a lucky daughter...
ReplyDeleteGirl...the way you write..muaah :)
Yes, she is a lucky daughter indeed :) Thanks Love! I love reading your comments :)
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